Wednesday, February 26, 2014

Editing Run-Ons

1. For example, learning, I must learn every day. If I don't learn from my experiences and others I will have no direction with a narrow mind.

2. I have learned from the Bible to be kind and generous to my enemies, and to learn with an educated mind.

1 comment:

  1. #2 is edited well. You recognize that you have two 'and's in there, and that the first one combines parallel actions.

    #1 is nicely fixed with a period, which allows you to see the bigger issue with the clarity of that first sentence. The word 'Learning' is the subject of that sentence, but you don't put it with a verb. The subject needs a verb; plus, the structure highlights the repetitive aspect of learning and learn so close together. The whole thought is just not well fleshed out, yet. Here is an example of a clearer idea that also brings to light your LEAD:

    "For example, 'Learning' reminds me that a leader much gain knowledge every day."

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