Wednesday, February 5, 2014

General Hook

When in doubt, Size matters to those who do not believe in themselves. Maybe from experience or failures in the past. As quoted by Bruce Lee "As you think, so shall you become." In a ring going toe to toe with a bigger opponent or even with an opponent with more experience, this becomes very true. Though negative thoughts run through my head when the going gets tough there is no space for negativity for I am my biggest opponent. To over come this fear of loss and rejection is to conquer one's self and accept their weaknesses.Accept the fear of loss and understand it will not keep me down, for one learns from their own losses and train to have a victorious tomorrow. Train my weaknesses until it becomes a strong quality and strong qualities into second nature. For when I'm facing an opponent fatigued and in doubt, i always remember that "I'm light and round, my fights profound. Not heavy and square, i won't dare." It brings me back to the basics and reminds me that true power comes from with in. And just like a ball I bounce right back, not another one of my opponents roadblocks to success.

- Jeyson Ruiz
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  1. Professor A.February 7, 2014 at 5:41 AM

    Okay, the first sentence is a bit distracting in that "size matters" makes me think quite immaturely of what you are references.

    Don't waste space with "As quoted" as your phrase. To use the word quote when giving a quote is redundant. Start off the sentence, instead, with the subject of the quote: Bruce Lee. Heck, even give a modifying phrase that gives readers a sense of who he is and why size matters with him.

    He was tiny, right? But he was also a bad--- kung fu master. So describe him as such in your providing of his quote!

    I would also explain through context that you, too, are discussing martial arts. Not boxing or street fighting or dance offs!

    Grammatically, your in need of work on pronouns. Just skimming the bulk of those sentences that come after the hook, there are a lot of shifts from singular I and one's self to a plural "their." Try to rewrite those sentence from the first person "I" point of view in each case. "My self...." If you do your job talking about yourself, trust the reader will see the universal connection you are making.

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